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Post by madsniper on Jul 5, 2006 20:43:33 GMT -5
Ok, this is the thread where I post the new page from WN and you guys can comment on it. Why? Because I live for feedback. ;D (Plus, No Need For Bushido does it and I want to be just like them!) Onward!
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Post by madsniper on Jul 5, 2006 20:44:51 GMT -5
Alright, newest page:
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martiansushi
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Post by martiansushi on Jul 5, 2006 22:51:48 GMT -5
okay, to cut to the chase, this is great because it gives us a climactic moment without really giving us very many answers (darn those authors and their secrets...). visually i like it , though the perspective of Lohaun on the couch seems a little skewed. the one thing i'd like to see change is the dialogue flow - it's sort of hard to follow Irshen's thoughts in panel... 5, i guess? the bit about turning one's back on hundreds. i think i figured it out in the end, it just took me a little bit to get there... all in all, though, i am really excited about what is happening next, and i adore your coloring and graphics style! -- martian sushi, also critic extraordinaire
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Post by madsniper on Jul 5, 2006 23:20:35 GMT -5
Yeah, that perspective is a little off. I think it has a lot to do with how the cabinet is turned behind her, but also it's just wonky. Irshen's dialogue is off, really? Huh, I thought it was working. Is it just vague? I have a problem with vague. >_< Btw, I thoroughly encourage critiques, guys! ~snipes *won't learn if she isn't told
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Post by martiansushi on Jul 6, 2006 21:16:39 GMT -5
I don't know that 'off' is the word... more like I had trouble figuring out which bubble followed what . Could be just me! -- martian sushi
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Post by madsniper on Jul 6, 2006 22:12:54 GMT -5
Oh!! Heheh. Ok. Yeah, I was wondering if that would be a problem. That's one thing I can highly recommend with comic pages, is that you figure out where the bubbles are going to go before you start the art. That way you won't have to feel bad about covering things up and end up with bubbles every which way. ;D
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Post by CrimsonKissaki on Aug 14, 2006 12:27:47 GMT -5
I haven't had any bad thoughts about your layout on here, but one thing I have always wondered about is the large font sizes that a lot of comics use on their speech bubbles. I usually have my primary monitor set to 1600x1200 res (hey im a techy geek, i gotta see stuff) and I can see everything fine. Id think that if you're worried about the balloons taking up too much space, drop the font size a notch or two and see how much space you can save. Although *I* think you're doing flipping fantastic! *sends happy Zen thoughts for more pages*
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Post by madsniper on Aug 14, 2006 13:34:52 GMT -5
Aw! *squee* You get karma! The word bubbles do take up a lot of space, and it can be extremely frustrating (especially when they're covering up huge pieces of the art *crais*) but I like to go large with the type, just to be on the safe side. I went pretty small with the type in MH at first, but then a lot of people complained about not being able to read the pages. And then there are the cooks surfing on their tiny blackberries. A size or two smaller shouldn't hurt though...
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Post by CrimsonKissaki on Aug 14, 2006 13:44:06 GMT -5
Meh, unless you went back and re-sized all of the bubbles they all look the same to me. And since I can read em just fine I think they're blind. Foolish peoples. *Whacks them with the NERF bat of +10 annoyance*
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Post by madsniper on Aug 16, 2006 12:13:46 GMT -5
OK new page guys! Finally... So what'd ya think?
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Post by CrimsonKissaki on Aug 16, 2006 13:41:52 GMT -5
*looks around for a cigarette to smoke* mmmmmm ... good comic hehe, he has a sniper rifle *happy happy bouncing dance of impending mayhem!*
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Post by madsniper on Aug 16, 2006 14:20:56 GMT -5
Yes, yes he does. An m24 to be specific. *evil chuckle* Man, it's insain how much that hung me up on this page, finding reference for guns and learning enough about them to have the characters operate them correctly. I was gonna have him cock the bolt there with a neat sound effect, but of course sniper rifles don't make sounds effects. *sigh*
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Post by CrimsonKissaki on Aug 16, 2006 14:43:39 GMT -5
oooh but they DO make noises! KABOOM!!!! :-D
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Post by madsniper on Aug 16, 2006 14:47:53 GMT -5
Lol!
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Post by martiansushi on Aug 17, 2006 9:26:18 GMT -5
Haha! I knew it! Irshen is awesome!! Here, let me just get multiple dangerous weapons out of my closet... psst - I think he likes Lohaun er, maybe this ough tto go on speculation... Anyway, Love the shading on this page (love your shading in general), and Lohaun's expression in the last panel is priceless hehe!
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